Adventure Club

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jmluvsbob 27th Jun 2022, 3:48 PM

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Hey, I happen to like Isaac’s face! So no complaints from me at all. And actually I think you made a good decision in that panel with Ghostfoot. It’s a nice a parallel to how she’s feeling, and I feel like it works good.

I like this backstory we’re getting. So her father disappeared when she was five, huh? That could mean a whole lot of things. Heck, he could still even be alive. And god, for it having been a few days ago, Ghostfoot is holding on pretty strongly. Poor girl.

maice 27th Jun 2022, 5:08 PM

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Thanks! I like his face too, if I can get it right. Yeah, I think the bigger issue is panel 3 - I left a lot more space for balloons than what I needed. Panel 4 is empty, but it also conveys something so that's all right. I guess I could always come back later and fill in more background on panel 3... but who wants to do that.

Yep, he is gone - he's not alive. He was killed by trolls or something. I can't remember what I originally said lol. The point is - she, from her pov, doesn't actually know what happened to him. Just one day he went out and never came back. That's why she's all gung ho about returning this guy's shield to his family and letting them know what happened to him.

killersteak 28th Jun 2022, 7:58 AM

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ill buy ad space in panel 3. how much?

maice 28th Jun 2022, 1:14 PM

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haha. For you, one million $$

cactusaurus 27th Jun 2022, 4:34 PM

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Seconding what jmluvsbob said! I think the 4th panel is super effective at communicating not just her loneliness, but her loss too.

Ghostfoot, you are honestly doing so well for someone who is on their own for the first time and also probably dealing with a huge amount of grief! :( Poor girl, I’m glad she has Isaac for company

maice 27th Jun 2022, 5:11 PM

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Thank you! I commented this to jm, but I'll say it to you also: I think the 3rd panel is the bigger problem, looking at it again now. Just too much space. I might fill it in later. I probably won't.

Probably the one thing that's helping Ghostfoot right now is exploring this new and exciting world she never really got to see before!

Firefly Jelly 27th Jun 2022, 5:59 PM

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Careful, Isaac. If Ghostfoot stares at you too long, she's gonna imprint.

I also happen to have guessed that there's going to be a huge reveal in the future, where Ghostfoot's long-lost twin sister arrives and the main bad guy yells, "Curses! GhostFEET!"

maice 28th Jun 2022, 4:29 AM

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that's so funny! Sadly, there is no twin :(

Stever 27th Jun 2022, 6:38 PM

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She looks so dejected. Makes you feel for her loss.

maice 28th Jun 2022, 4:30 AM

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Good! Cause I intended her to look dejected!

killersteak 28th Jun 2022, 7:56 AM

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Isaac. Underpants you can depend on. ™

maice 28th Jun 2022, 1:12 PM

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I don't even know what to say, steak

Guest 28th Jun 2022, 12:35 PM

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I think panel three works fine. I like the diagonal and the warm/cool background color contrasts. Maybe a vague hint of the wall behind Issac could be added, but no more than that.

maice 28th Jun 2022, 1:13 PM

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that's really cool you mentioned that! I had mentioned the color contrasts alongside their moods for that panel in my author comment, then deleted it for some reason. So it's interesting you noticed. I mean, it wasn't on purpose, that was totally an accident but it was cool how it turned out.

anyway, thanks

Marcel 29th Jun 2022, 9:51 AM

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That comment was by me. Sometimes CF logs people in as Guest for some reason.

maice 29th Jun 2022, 9:54 AM

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I figured that happened. As it happens to me a lot! Not so much since the update to fix it, but at least once or twice. Anyway glad to know who it was! Thanks!

Thracecius 28th Jun 2022, 3:16 PM

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If Ghostfoot gets anymore sympathetic I think I'm going to break down into tears on her behalf. Alone with her mother since she was five? Her mother only died a few days ago? This poor gal is more resilient than an overstretched rubberband waiting to snap. I recommend lots of hugs and a solid friend, the latter of which Isaac seems to be working towards. :)

I think panel three works just fine myself, it necessarily keeps your attention on the two characters and the dialogue, but keeps a sense of depth and position with the background outline and lighting. By contrast, the deliberate lack of any surroundings and the darker shades in panel four conveys exactly what you wanted, showing the complete feeling of loss and isolation that Ghostfoot feels. When you couple this new reality of her character with the fact that she immediately set out to find employment you realize just how capable she really is, no matter what she thinks, and I think Isaac is about to remind her of this fact.

Keep trusting your instincts, Maice, you've done a splendid job so far and I enjoy every page very much. :)

maice 29th Jun 2022, 4:39 PM

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thank you! As I said to someone else, it probably helps that she's now exploring a whole world she didn't really know about before. That's probaby a decent distraction.

And thanks about the panel! I keep saying maybe I can add in a bit more background to 3, like some of the tables and chairs out there in the distance. But who am I kidding, I know I'm not going to.

I'm glad you're enjoying it!

Kyo 30th Jun 2022, 2:03 PM

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yet more entries on the isaac face list huh

maice 30th Jun 2022, 2:05 PM

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yeah it's such a pain. He should have been born rich instead of beautiful. As I always say.

A Few Days Ago

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